For what it’s worth, I had considered making a similar suggestion. —John
> On Jan 18, 2024, at 9:15 AM, Robert Wilton via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> > wrote: > > > > Robert Wilton has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-emu-aka-pfs-11: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to > https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot-positions/__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!D3XmPil9SeElg7PwpTGL6O92-GIuUOHOtTaHDVvNd5uwpTiosH5nFNFLa_7qE0ilMxX-P0spmTr_$ > for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-emu-aka-pfs/__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!D3XmPil9SeElg7PwpTGL6O92-GIuUOHOtTaHDVvNd5uwpTiosH5nFNFLa_7qE0ilMxX-Pyd36xXz$ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > Hi, > > Thanks for this document, just one relatively minor suggestion. I suggest > dropping the first paragraph of the abstract and just keep the second. The > first paragraph seems to be about justifying why this document exists which I > think is much better placed in the introduction, or a background subsection of > the introduction. This shortens the abstract to just describing what the > document is. > > Regards, > Rob > > > _______________________________________________ Emu mailing list Emu@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/emu
