And chapter six.
Standard C&C Disclaimer: All the below is my only occasionally useful
humble opinion, my only occasionally correct grammatical and spelling
corrections, and/or my only occasionally funny humor.
The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:
> She stood silently on the roof of the school, watching the sun rise over the
> foolish city of weak, pathetic humans.
>
> Her instincts were to descend into the living mass below and rend, tear,
> rip, kill, devour--to take the souls of these prey creatures for her own, to
> become stronger, to...
And yet, oddly, she's more sympathetic than Timothy so far.
> Makoto sat across from the vice-principal of her school, face hard, fists
> clenched tightly in the fabric of her skirt, eyes narrowed.
>
> "Kino-san," the officious little man was saying, peering at her through
> tiny, oval-framed spectacles, "you must understand that we care very deeply
> about the reputation of this school. The actions of our students reflect on
> the entire school--for good, or for ill."
Well, that explains last chapter's cliffhanger.
> Only the most observant would have noticed a glance pass between the
> quasi-popular class ditz, Tsukino Usagi, and the friendless, unapproachable
> model student, Mizuno Ami. Such an observant person would have noticed a
> very slight change in the usually hostile, aloof gaze the genius girl held
> for all of her classmates, and the barest nod of--respect?--she afforded the
> long-haired girl before returning to her textbook.
>
> One person, out of the thirty in the class, did in fact notice. But Umino
> Gurio, for once, decided it wasn't his business, and promptly forgot all
> about it.
Heh.
> Minako stifled a yawn as the class shifted in preparation for the next
> period. *One good thing about Japanese schools,* she mused, *at least it's
> the teachers who move from class to class and not the students.*
>
> Many murmurs stirred as the teacher for the next lesson entered, accompanied
> by a strikingly handsome youth. Mina immediately sat up straight and focused
> her full attention on the front of the room. *I think I'm in love,* she
> mused, before reminding herself she already had a boyfriend.
Oh, since when has _that_ stopped Minako?
> "Now, you were all to choose a passage in English to recite in class today,"
> the teacher continued, ignoring the continued giggling of several girls at
> the handsome new teaching assistant. "Is anyone prepared?" Three hands went
> up out of the thirty-one students. The teacher seemed slightly surprised at
> one of the hands, and nodded in that direction. "Hino-san, we'll start with
> you."
Hmm.
> She hissed, closing her eyes. Her pimp. *Just perfect.* With a frustrated
> groan, she picked up the phone and hit a speed-dial button.
>
> //Motoki speaking.//
...I just can't see it. I mean, I suppose it makes sense, but... ;)
> "Mercury Power, Make-Up!"
>
> "Moon Prism Power, Make-Up!"
>
> Ami and Usagi transformed in mid-fall, completing the transformation just in
> time to catch themselves, cracking the pavement beneath their boots.
...now I'm imaging the transformation sequence.
> "Yes, just barely. What the heck just happened?"
>
> "That," Luna said, glancing sharply upwards, "is the Papyrus Witch, Amami.
> She's fairly dangerous. She can control all forms of paper, making weapons,
> clothing, traps, and even explosives out of it."
Hmm. So there's a fairly limited number of youma in this universe, I
suppose, if Luna can recognize a random one on sight.
> The girl's blue eyes pierced her, making her squirm uncomfortably. Suddenly,
> the girl stood. "Mercury," she yelled, "Give us some fog! Nice and deep!"
>
> "Ryoukai," the blue-haired girl called back. She made a wave of her hands,
> and a deep, chilly mist blanketed the area. The monster screeched in anger.
Ryoukai?
> With determination, Makoto stood, clenching her fist, and screamed the words
> that blazed through her mind:
>
> "Jupiter Power, MAKE-UP!"
And another Senshi down. Or up. Or whatever.
Anyway, it's another good chapter, looking forward to the next, etc.,
etc. Keep up the good work!
--
Aaron Nowack
"Never let reality get in the way of a good hypothesis."
http://www.mimiru.net/
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