Francis Dupont wrote:
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draft-miller-media-type-cellml-03.txt
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Hi Francis,
Thanks for the review. Please see my inlined comments below.
Please resolve these comments along with any other
Last Call comments you may receive.
Summary: ready
Some little comments/suggestions which can be handled in AUTH48:
the case of Format/format is not uniform, I propose Format everywhere
if it is really a part of the name, or Format the first time and format
for further cases, or format.
I have changed all appearances of "Format" to "format", except in the
phrase "CellML Umbrella Format Registry" (which is the correct case, as
per the specification). I will be submitting a revised draft to correct
this shortly.
in 3: mathmatical -> mathematical
This was fixed unintentionally in draft-miller-media-type-cellml-04,
which has not yet been processed by the IETF secretariat.
As the style is native (i.e,, not American) English I propose in 4 for
Author/Change "shall" in place of "will" in "... itself will not change ."
As the CellML Umbrella 1.0 specification is a non-IETF document, I don't
believe shall or SHALL is appropriate in this case. However, the CellML
team has endorsed the document, meaning that any future work will result
in a new document with an increased version number. The phrase is
therefore a statement of fact rather than a command, and so "will" is
more appropriate than "shall".
Best regards,
Andrew Miller
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