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Document: Transmission of IPv6 Packets over IEEE 802.15.4 Networks
Reviewer: Joel M. Halpern
Review Date: 5-March-2007
IESG Telechat date: 08 March 2007
Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.
It is very well written and clear. I did have twhree minor comments
that should be considered if there is reason to revise this document.
Minor:
I don't know that I have ever seen a document before that
says "thou shalt not extend this." (Section 5, last sentence before
5.1, "All headers used in LOWPAN adaptation layer SHALL be defined in
this format document.")
The fragmentation technique sends an offset that is in
multiple of 8 bytes. It would be sensible to say that all fragments
except the last SHOULD (MUST?) be multiple of eight bytes, so that
the fragment offset works well. (section 5.3)
At the beginning of section 10.1 on Encoding IPv6 Header
fields, the wording is slightly misleading. The wording says "The
following common IPv6 header values may be compressed from the
onset..." I would suggest instead "The following IPv6 header values
are expected to be common on 6lowPan networks, so the HC1 header has
been constructed to efficiently compress them from the onset."
Yours,
Joel M. Halpern
At 09:05 AM 3/5/2007, Brian E Carpenter wrote:
Joel,
draft-ietf-6lowpan-format-11 has sneaked late onto the agenda
for this week, if you have a chance to look at it (you are listed
for version 10 as a Last Call review).
Brian
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