I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-addressing-07.txt Reviewer: Brian Carpenter Review Date: 4 June 2007 IESG Telechat date: 7 June 2007 Summary: This draft is on the right track but needs an overview section. Comments: Substantive: ------------ The document states that it clarifies the use of addresses in GMPLS. For an outsider, if this is clarification, the mud must be thick. To my taste, after the terminology section, there should be an architectural overview (or a pointer to a suitable existing overview). It's very tough to jump straight into the details. Having just spent half a day working on the generic locator-ID split, I found the way this document uses "address" to refer sometimes to locator-address and sometimes to identifier-address quite unclear. I am puzzled by the fact that section 3 introduces the concept of (un)numbered links but then sections 4 and 5 speak of (un)numbered addresses. Which do you mean? Are they different? Why doesn't the terminology section define (un)numbered links and (un)numbered addresses, assuming they are different. Also, how can a link have an address? I can see how one end of a p2p link can have an address, but that makes two addresses per link. This is the sort of thing I would expect to see clarified in an overview section. I see in the writeup that there was debate about the document category. IMHO since the draft summarizes and collates information from other standards track documents, but (in principle at least) defines nothing new, Informational is the correct category. I can't comment on the accuracy of the details in sections 4-8, but I'm sure the WG has the expertise to get that right. The Security Considerations strike me as weak, but I will leave that to the Security Area review. Editorial: ---------- The Abstract and the Introduction both include: > This document does not define new procedures of processes s/of/or/
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