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Document: draft-ietf-mip6-experimental-messages-01.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date:  2007-09-04
IETF LC End Date: 2007-09-12
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Comments: some editorial questions:
 - in abstract page 1: s/header/Header/
   BTW as MH is the common abbrev Mobility Header should always get the 'H'.
   This is not clear for Mobility Option but a choice has to be done and
   applied...
 - ToC and section 7: s/Acknowledgements/Acknowledgments/
 - section 1 page 3: s/Proxy MIPv6/Proxy Mobile IPv6/
 - the figure in page 3 seems a bit strange because some important and
   decribed fields are not in it. I believe it is directly from RFC 3775
   section 6.1 "Mobility Header" which gives only the content of messages,
   so IMHO this section needs an explicit reference to RFC 3775 6.1.

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