Miguel,
Thank you very much for the comments. Please see in-line
responses below.
At 04:51 PM 3/24/2008, Miguel Garcia wrote:
>I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
>reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
>http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
>
>Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
>or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
>
>Document: draft-ietf-ospf-rfc2370bis-02.txt
>Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
>Review Date: 2008-03-25
>IETF LC End Date: 2008-03-26
>
>Summary: The document is ready for publication as a proposed standard RFC.
>
>Comments:
>
>- Section 2.2. The document mentions an expired Internet-Draft
>without a reference. Since this is not critical for the document,
>and since this document is going to be published as an RFC, I would
>suggest to delete the draft name, perhaps even the second complete sentence.
Section 2.2 is an Acknowledgments section. As such, it is legitimate
for the authors to indicate the source of this work. The draft name
is not formally referenced intentionally, and is listed to represent
a factual past event.
I recommend against any change to this section.
>- Section 3, 7th paragraph says:
>
> The
> receiver must always store a valid received Opaque LSA in its link-
> state database. The receiver must not accept Opaque LSAs that
> violate the flooding scope (e.g., a type-11 (domain-wide) Opaque LSA
>
>I think the "must" and "must not" should be normative (capitalized).
These paragraph is descriptive in a general fashion and 2119
capitalization is not appropriate. The corresponding prescriptive
text is in section 3.1 and uses 2119 key words (capitalization).
No change should be made to this section.
>- References [OSPF-MT] and [OSPFv3] do not list the version number
>of the draft. Actually, OSPF-MT has been published as RFC 4915.
We can either update & reissue or have the RFC editor fix...
>/Miguel
Much thanks again,
Lou
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>Miguel A. Garcia tel:+358-50-4804586
>Nokia Siemens Networks Espoo, Finland
>
>
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