Vijay: Thanks for your review. We will make all the changes you proposed during AUTH48.
> -----Original Message----- > From: Vijay K. Gurbani [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: Tuesday, July 01, 2008 2:51 PM > To: Nancy Cam-Winget (ncamwing); David McGrew (mcgrew); > Joseph Salowey (jsalowey); Hao Zhou (hzhou) > Cc: Tim Polk; General Area Review Team > Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of > draft-cam-winget-eap-fast-provisioning-08.txt > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team > (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, > please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD > before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-cam-winget-eap-fast-provisioning-08.txt > Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani > Review Date: 1 Jul 2008 > IESG Telechat date: 3 Jul 2008 > > Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC. > > Two comments and 3 nits below. > > Comments: > > 1/ In S4.1.{2,3}, there is a term "PAC opaque". I think you > mean "PAC-Opaque", the opaque data that was defined in S4.1.1. > 2/ In S6.3, first paragraph: should the "should" on line 3 be > normative? More so especially since the "MAY" seven lines > down is normative. > > Nits (on the chance that RFC Editor misses them): > > 1/ S3.2.3, third bullet item: missing the ending period. > 2/ S4.1.2, last sentence of first paragraph: > s/persisted/persistent > OR > s/persisted/persists > 3/ S6.2, second paragraph, 10th line: s/and ,/and, > > Thanks, > > - vijay > -- > Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent > 2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA) > Email: [EMAIL PROTECTED],bell-labs.com,acm.org} > WWW: http://www.alcatel-lucent.com/bell-labs > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
