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Document: draft-cam-winget-eap-fast-provisioning-08.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 1 Jul 2008
IESG Telechat date: 3 Jul 2008
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational
RFC.
Two comments and 3 nits below.
Comments:
1/ In S4.1.{2,3}, there is a term "PAC opaque". I think you
mean "PAC-Opaque", the opaque data that was defined in S4.1.1.
2/ In S6.3, first paragraph: should the "should" on line 3 be
normative? More so especially since the "MAY" seven lines
down is normative.
Nits (on the chance that RFC Editor misses them):
1/ S3.2.3, third bullet item: missing the ending period.
2/ S4.1.2, last sentence of first paragraph:
s/persisted/persistent
OR
s/persisted/persists
3/ S6.2, second paragraph, 10th line: s/and ,/and,
Thanks,
- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA)
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