Hi, Thank you very much for a thorough review of the text!
I agree with your comments, both major and editorial ones. The suggested changes are quite acceptable to the authors and would like to reflect them to the next update. We will wait for Roni's or Cullen's instructions on how we should proceed. Best regards, yusuke -- ============ Yusuke Hiwasaki, NTT Cyber Space Labs. [email protected] Tel: +81-422-59-4815 (Fax: +81-422-60-7811) At Fri, 06 Feb 2009 11:04:28 -0600, Vijay K. Gurbani wrote: > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-avt-rtp-uemclip-04 > Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani > Review Date: Feb. 6, 2009 > IESG Telechat date: Unknown > > Summary: The draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard. > > Major issues: 1 (see below) > Minor issues: None > Nits/editorial comments: 2 (see below) > > Major issue: This is a very well-written draft, complete with SDP > examples. The one major comment I have is in S6.3.1. More > specifically, the list of guidelines provided are not "additional > guidelines for establishing a session using an offer-answer > model" as much as they are guidelines for using the UEMCLIP format > in SDP. In other words, the bullet list is not changing how > offer-answer works (and it cannot, obviously); but it is providing > better semantics on how to handle offer-answer exchanges > *containing* UEMCLIP format. Does that make sense? > > The modified text can be as simple as (note the spelling mistake > correction on "Followings"): > > OLD: > Followings are additional guidelines for establishing a session using > an offer-answer model. > > NEW: > The following is a detailed list on the semantics of using > the UEMCLIP payload format in an offer-answer exchange: > > Nits/Editorials: > 1/ In S1, second paragraph: > s/switched using SDP exchange./changed using an SDP exchange./ > > 2/ In S2, first paragraph: > s/shift to the wideband./shift to using wideband communication./ > > Thanks, > > - vijay > -- > Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent > 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60566 (USA) > Email: v...@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org} > Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/ _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
