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Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-rsvp-l3vpn-02.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: June 11, 2009
IESG Telechat date: June 11, 2009
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.
The draft has 0 major issues, 0 minor issues, and 2 Nits/Editorial
comments.
Nits/Editorial:
1) In the Abstract, you may want to expand CE and PE, more so
since you do define them in the Terminology section. Therefore,
I assume that they are relatively obscure, or at least not
commonly known.
2) In drafts containing PDU layouts, I am used to seeing byte
boundaries as follows:
0 1 2 3
0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1
+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+
to orient the reader on how many bytes/bits a certain PDU field
occupies. I do not see such legends in this draft; I do not
know whether this is a problem or not, but thought I'd point
out for the sake of completeness.
Thanks,
- vijay
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