Hello Vijay, Thanks for the review.
We will follow your two editorial suggestions whenever we post a new version. (RSVP objects are often illustrated without byte boundaries, but I think this is for historical reasons and I don;t see a reason to to add those).
Francois On 11 Jun 2009, at 21:57, Vijay K. Gurbani wrote:
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-rsvp-l3vpn-02.txt Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: June 11, 2009 IESG Telechat date: June 11, 2009 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard. The draft has 0 major issues, 0 minor issues, and 2 Nits/Editorial comments. Nits/Editorial: 1) In the Abstract, you may want to expand CE and PE, more so since you do define them in the Terminology section. Therefore, I assume that they are relatively obscure, or at least not commonly known. 2) In drafts containing PDU layouts, I am used to seeing byte boundaries as follows: 0 1 2 3 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ to orient the reader on how many bytes/bits a certain PDU field occupies. I do not see such legends in this draft; I do not know whether this is a problem or not, but thought I'd point out for the sake of completeness. Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60566 (USA) Email: v...@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org} Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/
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