Hi Avshalom,
Can you respond to Joel's question about the definition of "day"?
Thanks!
Ben.
On Jun 26, 2009, at 10:44 AM, Joel M. Halpern wrote:
(As all comments are minor, and there are many authors, I am
directing this to the shepherd rather than copying all the authors
and WG.)
I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-simple-interdomain-scaling-analysis-06.txt
Presence Interdomain Scaling Analysis for SIP/SIMPLE
Reviewer: Joel M. Halpern
Review Date: 26-June-2009
IETF LC End Date: 6-July-2009
IESG Telechat date: N/A
Summary: This document is probably ready for publication as an
Informational RFC. If revisions are needed, some minor items should
be considered.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
I think that I do not understand how the document uses the term
"day". c01 is the average lifetime of a subscription. However, it
also seems to be the definition of day in section 2.3.5. This is
not a big deal as it seems to normalize out when one looks at the
per-second numbers. But it seems to make the "per day" numbers
confusing. I suspect that what is needed is simply a definition of
"day" for this document.
Nits/editorial comments:
The introduction has multiple examples of unusual English language
usages. They are not listed here, but are left to the editors to
analyze and resolve. (This problem continues at a lower frequency
throughout the document.)
Section 2.3.5 labels the third bottom line value as B02 instead of
B03.
The third line in section 3.1.3 should have a comma in the 23437M
number for readability.
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