Thanks for the review. Carlos and I will make these changes right away
as we do not have any issues with them.
--Tom
On 7/2/09 7:20 AM, "Avshalom Houri" <[email protected]> wrote:
> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html
> <http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html> ).
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-vccv-bfd-05
> Reviewer: Avshalom Houri
> Review Date: 2009-07-02
> IETF LC End Date: 2009-07-02
> IESG Telechat date: (if known) --
>
> Summary: The document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.
>
> Major issues: None
>
> Minor issues:
>
> Line 480
> This precedence order prioritizes superset of functionality and
> simplicity of encapsulation.
> - Hard to understand what the sentence means.
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>
> line 259:
> the scope of this specification, and is instead defined in
> - Word "instead" is probably redundant.
>
> Line 287:
> within the rage 49152 through 65535. The IP Protocol Number and
> - rage -> range
>
> Line 378
> see Table 1 in in Section 3.
> - in in -> in
>
> Line 440
> continue using it until such time as the PW is re-signaled. In
> - Probably should be:
> continue using it until when the PW is re-signaled. In
>
> Line 466
> the order lowest list number CV Type to highest list number CV Type,
> - Should be:
> the order of the lowest list number CV Type to the highest list number CV
> Type,
>
> --Avshalom
>
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