I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-hokey-preauth-ps-11.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2010/01/20
IESG Telechat date: 2010/01/21
Summary: Ready
The version 09 was reviewed with Ready summary, this is about version 11.
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments (from previous review):
- Abstract page 2: Extensible Authentication Protocol -> ... (EAP)
What I meant is:
Extensible Authentication Protocol -> Extensible Authentication
Protocol (EAP)
Not: Extensible Authentication Protocol -> EAP
- 3.3.1 page 8: two forms:. ... -> two forms: horizontal and vertical.
(or: Horizontal and Vertical.)
- 13.2 pages 19 and 20: some spurious spaces before commas.
- 13.2 page 19: bad cut in URLs (<\nhttp or <htt\np...)
You still have some formating problems in references (please
signal them to the RFC Editor who'll fix them)
Regards
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