[email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] writes:
> I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-hokey-preauth-ps-11.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2010/01/20 > IESG Telechat date: 2010/01/21 > > Summary: Ready > > The version 09 was reviewed with Ready summary, this is about version > 11. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments (from previous review): > - Abstract page 2: Extensible Authentication Protocol -> ... (EAP) > What I meant is: > Extensible Authentication Protocol -> Extensible Authentication > Protocol (EAP) > Not: Extensible Authentication Protocol -> EAP OK. > > - 3.3.1 page 8: two forms:. ... -> two forms: horizontal and vertical. > (or: Horizontal and Vertical.) OK. > > - 13.2 pages 19 and 20: some spurious spaces before commas. OK. > - 13.2 page 19: bad cut in URLs (<\nhttp or <htt\np...) I can't se any URLs on p. 19, let alone poorly formatted ones ;-). Would you mind quoting a couple of examples, please? > You still have some formating problems in references (please > signal them to the RFC Editor who'll fix them) I think that they are all fixed in http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-hokey-preauth-ps-12.txt, please take a look. > > Regards > > [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
