Thanks Enrico. Will take care of them in the next revision. Cheers, Manav
> -----Original Message----- > From: Enrico Marocco [mailto:[email protected]] > Sent: Monday, May 10, 2010 8.28 PM > To: > [email protected] > f.org; [email protected] > Subject: Gen-ART LC review of > draft-ietf-opsec-routing-protocols-crypto-issues-04 > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-opsec-routing-protocols-crypto-issues-04 > Reviewer: Enrico Marocco > Review Date: May 10, 2010 > IETF LC End Date: May 10, 2010 > > Summary: Ready with nits. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Most of the nits are about undefined acronyms and about the case of > routing protocol messages. In particular: > > Abstract, first bullet: s/it has not/It has not/ > > Abstract, second bullet: s/actually/Actually/ > > S. 1.1, first para: replace the author names with the reference to a > relevant paper. > > S. 1.1, third para: define "LSA" > > S. 2, explicitly mention the version in the title, something > like: "Open > Shortest Path First, version 2 (OSPFv2) > > S. 2.2, bullet 2 and 3: make the case of "HELLO" and "NULL"consistent; > in the reminder of the section it is uppercase. > > S. 2.2, bullet 5: define "NBMA" > > S. 3, explicitly mention the version in the title, something > like: "Open > Shortest Path First, version 3 (OSPFv3) > > S. 3, second para: define ESP > > S. 3, second and fourth para: "null", case again. > > S. 3.1, first para: define "SA" > > S. 5, third para: rephrase the first sentence; something like the > following would probably sound better: "Compared to > previously described > IGP protocols, BGP has additional exposure due to the nature of the > environment where it is typically used, namely between autonomous > networks (under different administrative control)." > > S. 6.1, second bullet: "hello". > > S. 7, first para: s/nexthop/next hop/ > > S. 7.1, second bullet: s/spec/specification/ > > -- > Ciao, > Enrico > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
