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<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-isis-layer2-09 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: 19 January 2011 IETF LC End Date: IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: The document looks pretty good overall, but there are some edits that are recommended below. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: Abstract: Include name for acronym TLV and IS-IS, both are used before being defined. Include commas in the following sentence: Change from: “in this document are generic layer 2 additions and specific ones as needed are” To: “in this document are generic layer 2 additions and specific ones, as needed, are” Section 1: Paragraph 1, Line 5: Change From: Layer To: layer Paragraph 2, Line 2: Include acronym for PDU Paragraph 2, Line 3: Change from: “generic layer 2 additions and specific ones as needed are defined in” To: “generic layer 2 additions and specific ones, as needed, are defined in” Section 2: Line 1: Change from: “In this section we specify the enhancements” To either: “This section specifies the enhancements” Or: “In this section, we specify the enhancements” Line 2: Change from: “Layer-2” To: “layer 2” OR make the use of this consistent in the document. Section 2.1: Bullet 4: Make use of “Layer-2-IS-IS” consistent in the document. Paragraph 2: Note use of Level 1 and Layer 2 in this paragraph to make consistent (dash/no dash, upper or lower case “L”) Define acronym LSP in first line Section 2.2: Line 1: Change from: “Multi Topology aware” To: “Multi-Topology Aware” Bullet 5 (acronym already defined, it can be completely spelled out or use the defined acronym): Change From: “sub-TLVs: The MT aware Port Capabilities TLV” To: “sub-TLVs: The MT-PORT_CAP TLV” Last sentence: Include acronym for IIH. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
