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Document: draft-ietf-speermint-architecture-17
Reviewer: Avshalom Houri
Review Date: 2011-02-02
IESG last call date: 2011-02-03
Summary: The document is ready as an informational RFC
Major issues: None.
Minor issues: None.
Nits/editorial comments:
Line 357:
o An SBE can contain a SF function.
-> o An SBE can contain an SF function.
Line 421:
Function (LUF) to determine a target address, and then is resolves
-> Function (LUF) to determine a target address, and then it resolves
Line 466:
resolving these URIs to URIs for specific protocols such a SIP or
-> resolving these URIs to URIs for specific protocols such as SIP or
Line 485:
particular order and, importantly, not all of them may be used.
-> particular order and, importantly, not all of them have to be used.
Line 537:
SIP proxy. Optionally, a SF may perform additional functions such as
-> SIP proxy. Optionally, an SF may perform additional functions such
as
Line 540:
encryption. The SF of a SBE can also process SDP payloads for media
-> encryption. The SF of an SBE can also process SDP payloads for
media
Line 582:
The section defines uses of TLS between two SSPs [RFC5246] [RFC5746]
-> The section defines the usage of TLS between two SSPs [RFC5246]
[RFC5746]
Thanks
Avshalom
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