Avshalom - Thanks for performing a review of this document. All of the changes you have suggested will be made in a -18 update when I'm cleared to do so by my AD (Gonzalo). Please see my responses inline below to each specific item for the details, FYI.
Regards Jason On 2/2/11 8:47 AM, "Avshalom Houri" <[email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>> wrote: I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-speermint-architecture-17 Reviewer: Avshalom Houri Review Date: 2011-02-02 IESG last call date: 2011-02-03 Summary: The document is ready as an informational RFC Major issues: None. Minor issues: None. Nits/editorial comments: Line 357: o An SBE can contain a SF function. -> o An SBE can contain an SF function. [JL] Correction made exactly as you requested. Line 421: Function (LUF) to determine a target address, and then is resolves -> Function (LUF) to determine a target address, and then it resolves [JL] Correction made Line 466: resolving these URIs to URIs for specific protocols such a SIP or -> resolving these URIs to URIs for specific protocols such as SIP or [JL] Correction made Line 485: particular order and, importantly, not all of them may be used. -> particular order and, importantly, not all of them have to be used. [JL] Change made Line 537: SIP proxy. Optionally, a SF may perform additional functions such as -> SIP proxy. Optionally, an SF may perform additional functions such as [JL] Correction made Line 540: encryption. The SF of a SBE can also process SDP payloads for media -> encryption. The SF of an SBE can also process SDP payloads for media [JL] Correction made Line 582: The section defines uses of TLS between two SSPs [RFC5246] [RFC5746] -> The section defines the usage of TLS between two SSPs [RFC5246] [RFC5746] [JL] Correction made Thanks Avshalom
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