I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-intarea-shared-addressing-issues-02.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2011-02-01 IETF LC End Date: 2011-02-01 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Not Ready (a new version should be published) Major issues: None Minor issues: None but there are some comments from AD review and many from TSVDIR review so I really expect the document will be changed. BTW it seems these comments are about minor issues. Nits/editorial comments: (including personal comments) - 1 page 4: the beginning should be updated as the forecast was realized... - 5.1 page 10 (and other places): [I-D.ietf-tsvwg-port-randomization] was published as RFC 6056 - 5.2.1.1 page 11: UPnP IGD 2.0 last published last year - 9 page 14: at the exception of the last sentence the ICMP considerations are in fact about the ICMP echo service. I suggest to make this clearer: add some words at the beginning and make the last sentence about ICMP messages 'in general'. - 9 page 14: as far as I know *no* 'ping' tool supports the specification of the identifier to ping, so to provide 'identifier forwarding' for pinging a host behind a NAT is useless (i.e., it only satisfies the ego of the programmer :-). - 11 page 15: IMHO in most of the cases the 'special handling' is reassembly. BTW if some NAT can be distributed (i.e., they share the mapping state) as far as I know this is never true for the reassembly state. - 12 page 16: in "Address sharing solutions must record and store all mappings" the term mappings could be considered as too general, i.e., I don't believe the whole 7-tuple has to be logged. Now it is an informative document so a strict interpretation is not required (or even desirable). - 13.5 page 18 (and 6 page 13): RFC 3947 is no longer used: IKEv2 has integrated NAT-detection/protection/traversal. IMHO at least the reference must be updated. - 27 page 26: please update [UPnP-IGD]. BTW the UPnP v2 includes both IGD 1.0 and IGD 2.0 so it is enough to put the parent reference. spelling: - (twice) Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - wi-fi -> Wi-Fi - (and similar) geolocates -> geo-locates - (multiple) randomisation -> randomization - (twice) Behaviour -> Behavior - organisation -> organization - realise -> realize - customised -> customized - centralised -> centralized - (twice) optimisation -> optimization - (twice) utilise -> utilize (to summarize just switch to an American spelling checker :-) Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
