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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-haleplidis-forces-implementation-experience-02.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20110509 IETF LC End Date: 20110503 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - Abstract page 1: forwarding -> Forwarding - ToC page 2 (English -> US spelling): Developement -> Development Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 4: even with the section 1 just before I am not convinced it is useless to introduce FE and CE abbrevs. - 2 page 4: inconsitent singular/plural in "[RFC5812] presents a formal way to define FE Logical Functional Blocks (LFBs) using XML. LFB configuration components, capabilities, and associated events are defined when the LFB is formally created. The LFBs within the Forwarding Element (FE) are accordingly controlled in a standardized way by the ForCES protocol." I suggest "when LFBs are formally created." - 2 page 4: etc. -> etc, ??? - 2.1 page 4 (bad wording): protocol and model and its main goal -> protocol and model, and its main goal ? - 3.2 page 7: IPSec -> IPsec - 3.3 page 7: develeper -> developer - 3.3 page 7: new components etc -> new components, etc - 3.3.1 page 8: deconstructor -> destructor - 3.3.1 page 9: difficulty lie -> difficulty lies - 3.4.2 pages 14 and 15 (multiple): "Do this" is not wellcome in a formal description, it should be a goto X IMHO. - 3.4.2 page 14: mainheader -> main header ??? - 3.4.2 page 14 (comment): as a previous Lisp/functional language programmer I am not very happy with an explanation about difficulty from recursion. - 3.4.2 page 15 (twice): it must have inside -> it must include - 4 page 17 (title): Developement -> Development - 5 page 18 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 7 page 20: IPSec -> IPsec Regards [email protected] PS: I forgot to send this in time, I apologize. BTW all the comments and suggestions fall typically in the scope of the RFC Editor. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
