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Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-watson-fecframe-raptor<https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-watson-fecframe-raptor/>-10 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: 3/18/12 IETF LC End Date: IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: There are minor nits that should be resolved. This document describes Fully-Specified Forward Error Correction (FEC) Schemes for the Raptor and RaptorQ codes and their application to reliable delivery of media streams in the context of FEC Framework. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: Introduction: Consider changing the first sentence to introduce the acronym FEC: The FEC Framework [RFC6363] describes a general framework for the use of Forward Error Correction in association with arbitrary packet flows. TO: The Forward Error Correction (FEC) Framework [RFC6363] describes a general framework for the use of FEC in association with arbitrary packet flows. Second paragraph: Consider reducing the number of transition phrases: From: The FEC protection mechanism is independent of the type of the source data, which can be an arbitrary sequence of packets, including for example audio or video data. To: The FEC protection mechanism is independent of the type of the source data, which can be an arbitrary sequence of packets, for example audio or video data. Third bullet: define RTP Section 2, second and third bullets, Add a space after 'Section 6' Section 4.2, add a colon after MSBL Section 6.2.1.2: There appears to be two spaces after MSBL in the second paragraph Section 6.2.2: There is a '.' Out of place before Figure 2 In the paragraph after both figure 2 and 3, the trailing 'to' at the end of the sentence isn't necessary. Section 6.2.3: In the paragraph after both figure 4 and 5, the trailing 'to' at the end of the sentence isn't necessary. Section 7.4: Consider breaking the second sentence into multiple sentences. Second paragraph, second sentence, consider using commas instead of dashes: The MSBL parameter, and hence the number of symbols used in the FEC Encoding and Decoding operations, SHALL be set to one of the following values: _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
