Kathleen, thanks! I have updated the draft accordingly. I am waiting for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
Thomas On Mar 19, 2012, at 3:42 AM, <[email protected]> <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: > draft-watson-fecframe-raptor<https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-watson-fecframe-raptor/>-10 > Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty > Review Date: 3/18/12 > IETF LC End Date: > IESG Telechat date: (if known) > > Summary: There are minor nits that should be resolved. > This document describes Fully-Specified Forward Error Correction > (FEC) Schemes for the Raptor and RaptorQ codes and their application > to reliable delivery of media streams in the context of FEC > Framework. > > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > Introduction: Consider changing the first sentence to introduce the acronym > FEC: > The FEC Framework [RFC6363] describes a general framework for the use > of Forward Error Correction in association with arbitrary packet flows. > TO: The Forward Error Correction (FEC) Framework [RFC6363] describes a > general framework for the use > of FEC in association with arbitrary packet flows. > > Second paragraph: Consider reducing the number of transition phrases: > From: The FEC protection mechanism is independent of the type of the source > data, which can be an arbitrary sequence of packets, including for > example audio or video data. > To: The FEC protection mechanism is independent of the type of the source > data, which can be an arbitrary sequence of packets, for > example audio or video data. > Third bullet: define RTP > > Section 2, second and third bullets, Add a space after 'Section 6' > > Section 4.2, add a colon after MSBL > > Section 6.2.1.2: There appears to be two spaces after MSBL in the second > paragraph > > Section 6.2.2: There is a '.' Out of place before Figure 2 > In the paragraph after both figure 2 and 3, the trailing 'to' at the end of > the sentence isn't necessary. > > Section 6.2.3: > In the paragraph after both figure 4 and 5, the trailing 'to' at the end of > the sentence isn't necessary. > > Section 7.4: Consider breaking the second sentence into multiple sentences. > > Second paragraph, second sentence, consider using commas instead of dashes: > The > MSBL parameter, and hence the number of symbols used in the FEC > Encoding and Decoding operations, SHALL be set to one of the > following values: > > > > --- Dr. Thomas Stockhammer (CEO) || [email protected] || phone +49 89 978980 02 || cell +491725702667 || http://www.nomor-research.com Nomor Research GmbH - Sitz der Gesellschaft: München - Registergericht: München, HRB 165856 – Umsatzsteuer-ID: DE238047637 - Geschäftsführer: Dr. Thomas Stockhammer, Dr. Ingo Viering. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
