Sorry for re-sending. The first attempt seem not working. ________________________________________ From: Meral Shirazipour Sent: Friday, August 24, 2012 12:00 AM To: [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-mmusic-media-loopback-22
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> . Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-media-loopback-22 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2012-08-23 IETF LC End Date: 2012-08-23 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC, but I have some comments. Nits/editorial comments: [Page 4] line 5, suggestion: "that always loop incoming media back for sessions." ----> "that always loop incoming media back for all sessions." [Page 6] Section 3.1, suggestion for being consistent: "compliant to this memo" ----> "compliant to this specification" [Page 7] Section 3.1, 'loopback' ----> "loopback" [Page 10] paragraph 2, "as defined in later sections", if possible please specify the actual Section number. [Page 12] line 1, "the offer must contain", please double check that this is not a "MUST" [Page 13] Section 6, "from PLC" ----> "from Packet Loss Concealment (PLC) algorithm " [Page 15] , please add Figure caption under the header format. [Page 15] suggestion: "same clock rate MUST used " --missing be--> "same clock rate MUST be used " "Loss RLE report block" ----> "Loss Run Length Encoding (RLE) report block" Also -please run for section ##, and when referring to specific section use capital S in Section. -please spell out first occurrence of acronyms. Thanks, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
