I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> . Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mptcp-multiaddressed-09.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120828 IETF LC End Date: 20120815 IESG Telechat date: 20120830 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - the topic is not very well introduced but it is a member (and not the first one) of a group of documents so IMHO this can be really assessed only by reading all documents (in order)... - the language is English, not US English (I leave this to the RFC Editor, it just made my speller (configured for the US English) a bit fussy. - Abstract page 1 and many other places: i.e. -> i.e., (and e.g. -> e.g.,) - ToC pages 2 and 3, section 7 page 51: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2.3 page 10: implictly -> implicitly - 2.4 pages 10 (3) and 11 (2): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments - same 3 page 13 and 3.3.2 page 26 - 3.2 page 19: in "Doing the MAC exchange at this stage allow" allow -> allows? - 3.2 page 21: Deumultiplexing -> Demultiplexing - 3.3.1 page 24: neogiated -> negotiated ? - 3.3.2 page 27: restransmited -> restransmitted - 3.3.3 page 28: permissable -> permissible && oustanding -> outstanding - 3.3.4 page 29 and 3.4 page 34: succesfully -> successfully - 6 page 48: illustred -> illustrated - 6 page 48 figure 16: get the whole figure on the same page (more a warning for the RFC Editor BTW :-) - 8 pages 51 and 52: by [21]) Assignments _> by [21]). Assignments ?? - A page 55: accomodate -> accommodate - English vs US English from my speller (other than acknowledgement): behaviour utilisation signalled labelled optimisations maximise whilst learnt minimise specialised emphasised analyse Thanks [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
