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Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-gont-intarea-obsolete-eid-option-01 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: 10/25/12 IETF LC End Date: 11/1/12 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: The document needs a few small revisions. This document formally deprecates the IPv6 Endpoint Identification (EID) option (hex value 0x8a). Major issues: Minor issues: RFC2119 is referenced, but not used. I don't see the use of any RFC2119 language in the document, so it may be safe to remove this reference. I don't think the reference for EID option is valid. I also looked at the reference in the IANA page and that no longer contains a link. From a google search, it looks like this was an internet draft that was never published as an RFC and expired, http://ana-3.lcs.mit.edu/~jnc/nimrod/eidoption.txt Listing it as "A work in progress" when it is an expired draft s not appropriate. Nits/editorial comments: I recommend changing the following portion of the abstract to state what is accomplished in this draft as the language is a little confusing: "possibly serving as a basis for providing advice" Since this draft doesn't actually provide the advice, just says it may provide a basis for providing the advice, I would recommend leaving this out of the abstract. Recommend removing "e.g." fromt he last sentence int he Security Considerations section as it is not needed. Change from: "However, formally deprecating this option may serve as a basis for e.g. providing advice about filtering packets containing such option (in a similar way to [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for the IPv4 case)." TO: "However, formally deprecating this option may serve as a basis for providing advice about filtering packets containing such option (in a similar way to [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for the IPv4 case)." Thank you, Kathleen _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
