Thanks for these comments. They have all been addressed by means of an RFC
editor note.
Ron
> -----Original Message-----
> From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of
> Moriarty, Kathleen
> Sent: Thursday, October 25, 2012 4:36 PM
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> [email protected]; [email protected]
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> Subject: Gen-art review of draft-gont-intarea-obsolete-eid-option-01
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> Document: draft-gont-intarea-obsolete-eid-option-01
> Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty
> Review Date: 10/25/12
> IETF LC End Date: 11/1/12
> IESG Telechat date: (if known)
>
> Summary: The document needs a few small revisions.
> This document formally deprecates the IPv6 Endpoint Identification
> (EID) option (hex value 0x8a).
>
> Major issues:
>
> Minor issues:
> RFC2119 is referenced, but not used. I don't see the use of any
> RFC2119 language in the document, so it may be safe to remove this
> reference.
>
> I don't think the reference for EID option is valid. I also looked at
> the reference in the IANA page and that no longer contains a link.
> From a google search, it looks like this was an internet draft that was
> never published as an RFC and expired, http://ana-
> 3.lcs.mit.edu/~jnc/nimrod/eidoption.txt
> Listing it as "A work in progress" when it is an expired draft s not
> appropriate.
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>
> I recommend changing the following portion of the abstract to state
> what is accomplished in this draft as the language is a little
> confusing:
> "possibly serving as a basis for providing advice"
> Since this draft doesn't actually provide the advice, just says it may
> provide a basis for providing the advice, I would recommend leaving
> this out of the abstract.
>
> Recommend removing "e.g." fromt he last sentence int he Security
> Considerations section as it is not needed.
> Change from:
> "However, formally deprecating this option
> may serve as a basis for e.g. providing advice about filtering
> packets containing such option (in a similar way to
> [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for the IPv4 case)."
> TO:
> "However, formally deprecating this option
> may serve as a basis for providing advice about filtering
> packets containing such option (in a similar way to
> [I-D.ietf-opsec-ip-options-filtering] for the IPv4 case)."
>
>
> Thank you,
> Kathleen
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