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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-icp-guidance-04 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2012-12-19 IETF LC End Date: 2012-12-20 IESG Telechat date: 2013-01-10 Summary: This draft is almost ready to be published as Informational RFC but I do have some comments. Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 3], last line, "The most importance" --should be--> "The most important" -[Page 3], line 3, "on a unplanned"--should be--> "on an unplanned" -[Page 6], paragraph 2 starting "There is an anecdote of..."--suggestion--> This anecdote could be removed as the point is clear enough from the remaining text in Section 3. -[Page 10], last sentence, "TLS" --first use--> "Transport Layer Security (TLS)" -[Page 11], diagram, please add Figure number and caption. -[Page 12], Section 8 Servers. Question: is it relevant to add some text regarding middleboxes and expected behavior? -[Page 16], last paragraph, "AAAA records are provid."--typo-->"AAAA records are provided." -[Page 22], Section 18.2. Informative References, please update draft references to their latest version: I-D.ietf-6renum-enterprise,I-D.ietf-6renum-static-problem,I-D.ietf-v6ops-6204bis, and I-D.matthews-v6ops-design-guidelines. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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