Thanks Meral. We will take care of these if a new version is required; otherwise they can be handled by the RFC Editor.
Regards Brian On 19/12/2012 06:13, Meral Shirazipour wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, > please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq > . > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may > receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-icp-guidance-04 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2012-12-19 > IETF LC End Date: 2012-12-20 > IESG Telechat date: 2013-01-10 > > > > Summary: > This draft is almost ready to be published as Informational RFC but I do have > some comments. > > > Nits/editorial comments: > -[Page 3], last line, "The most importance" --should be--> "The most > important" > -[Page 3], line 3, "on a unplanned"--should be--> "on an unplanned" > -[Page 6], paragraph 2 starting "There is an anecdote of..."--suggestion--> > This anecdote could be removed as the point is clear enough from the > remaining text in Section 3. > -[Page 10], last sentence, "TLS" --first use--> "Transport Layer Security > (TLS)" > -[Page 11], diagram, please add Figure number and caption. > -[Page 12], Section 8 Servers. Question: is it relevant to add some text > regarding middleboxes and expected behavior? > -[Page 16], last paragraph, "AAAA records are provid."--typo-->"AAAA records > are provided." > -[Page 22], Section 18.2. Informative References, please update draft > references to their latest version: > I-D.ietf-6renum-enterprise,I-D.ietf-6renum-static-problem,I-D.ietf-v6ops-6204bis, > and I-D.matthews-v6ops-design-guidelines. > > > > Best Regards, > Meral > > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson > Research > www.ericsson.com > > > > ------------------------------------------------------------------------ > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
