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Document: draft-ietf-simple-simple-08
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Feb-11-2013
IETF LC End Date: Feb-14-2013
IESG Telechat date: Not known
This document is ready as an Informational. Some comments for
changes follow.
Major: 0
Minor: 2
Nits: 1
Minor:
- S2.1, discussion of rfc3265: RFC3265 is now made obsolete by rfc6665,
I believe an update is appropriate here as well as other places where
a reference to rfc3265 is made.
Additionally, a reference to rfc3856 will be appropriate when
we first talk about presence as a SUBS/NOT event package i.e.,
s/Presence is defined as an event package/Presence is defined as
an event package [RFC3865]/
- S3.2, discussion of rfc3862: Does CPIM stand for "Common Presence and
Instant Messaging" or does it stand for "Common Profile for Instant
Messaging", as expanded in rfc3862 itself?
Nits:
- Abstract, perhaps better for a standard document to use more
formal language and:
s/It breaks them up into categories/It categorizes the specifications/
Thanks,
- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60563 (USA)
Email: vkg@{bell-labs.com,acm.org} / [email protected]
Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/
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