Thank you very much for this detailed review. Authors, do you have comments? While much of the comments are editorial, like Meral I had trouble understanding what the "chooses not conform" on page 17 means. Did you mean "chooses not to use"? Similarly, on page 18, I did not understand this: "a server implementation MUST treat an additional HOST command that was sent before a user has been authenticated as though a previous HOST command was not sent." Can you clarify?
Jari On Oct 19, 2013, at 1:14 PM, Meral Shirazipour <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, > please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq > . > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may > receive. > > Document: draft-hethmon-mcmurray-ftpext-ftp-hosts-03 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2013-10-18 > IETF LC End Date: 2013-10-18 > IESG Telechat date: 2013-10-24 > > > Summary: > This draft is ready to be published as Standard RFC but I do have some > comments. > > > Nits/editorial comments: > Overall the draft was a bit hard to read but given the long time it has been > around I presume it has passed implementers' test when it comes to clarity. > Here are a few comments: > -[Page 1], Asbtract: A sentence is missing between 1st and 2nd sentence: it > should say what is the problem with the fact stated in the 1st sentence. > -[Page 5], typo, "accomodate"-->"accommodate" (two occurrences) > -[Page 11] section 3.2.2. "the the server-PI "----> extra "the" > -[Page 17], Section 3.3 "or otherwise chooses not conform" --> not clear what > is not conform > -[Page 18], Section 4, not clear what this sentence means: > "a server implementation > MUST treat an additional HOST command that was sent before a user has > been authenticated as though a previous HOST command was not sent. > " > > Best Regards, > Meral > > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson > Research > www.ericsson.com > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
