On 12/9/13 10:11 AM, Romascanu, Dan (Dan) wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. 

Hi Dan, thanks for the review!

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> Document: draft-ietf-stox-core-07
> Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
> Review Date: 12/9/13
> IETF LC End Date: 12/11/13
> IESG Telechat date: 
> 
> Summary:
> Ready
> 
> Major issues:
> None
> 
> Minor issues:
> None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> 1. Please expand XSF at first occurrence

Ack.

> 2. It would be good to find some other wording for 'This document inaugurates 
> a series of SIP-XMPP interworking specifications'. For example 'This document 
> provides information for a series of SIP-XMPP interworking specifications'

How about s/inaugurates/provides the basis for/ ?

Peter

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