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Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-eman-framework-15.txt Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 24 February 2014 IETF LC End Date: 24 February 2014 IESG Telechat date: N/A Summary: I have no major issues with the document, but I have a few editorial comments that I ask the authors to consider addressing. Major issues: - Minor issues: - Nits/editorial comments: Section 4: ------------ Q4_1: The 3rd picture (Single Power Supply with Multiple Devices) is split between two pages. Would it be possible to make sure the whole picture is on a single page? Q4_2: In the 4th picture (Multiple Power Supplies with Single Devices), there are two "######" lines between 'power source 1' and 'device'? Is there a reason for that? Section 5: ------------ Q5_1: I think it would be useful to have a few general words about what is not covered also in the Abstract and Introduction. Section 6.2: -------------- Q6_2_1: Within section 6.2, and the subclasses, do you need to indicate '(Class)'? The section name already indicates '(Class)'? Q6_2_2: Shall 'Component (Component)' be 'Component (Class)'? Section 6.3: -------------- Q6_3_1: For section 6.3.2, I suggest to change the section title from 'Context in General' to 'Context: General', to be aligned with the other Context related attributes. Regards, Christer
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