Hi, Eric. I checked over the new version and it addresses my previous comments just fine. Thanks.
One trivial nit: s2.3.2: s/processesed/processed/ I noted Adrian's point about draft-ietf-mpls-tp-psc-itu in the tracker and I guess the suggested change is reasonable. If you are updating the text you could also fix: - The style is supposed to be 'RFC 6378' rather than RFC6378 outside of reference anchors. - Sort out the punctuations of 'i.e.,' : Currently there is one with no comma (5, para 1), two with one comma and one with two commas (s6, para 10 - the quote from RFC 6378 where it has one comma); and of 'e.g.,' : Currently one with no comma (s4.3, para 2). I'll send an official telechat review when the review is scheduled. Cheers, Elwyn On Mon, 2014-04-21 at 16:20 -0400, Eric Osborne wrote: > Folks- > > I have posted draft-ietf-mpls-psc-updates-04. It addresses the > gen-art comments as well as other feeback received on this list from > the v-03 last call. I also shuffled things around so that the section > order made more sense. > > This draft elicited a comment and a warning from idnits. I believe > they are both OK to disregard: > > 1) > > -- The draft header indicates that this document updates RFC6378, but the > abstract doesn't seem to directly say this. It does mention RFC6378 > though, so this could be OK. > > > It's pretty clear that the document updates rfc6378. > > > 2) > > == Missing Reference: 'RFC-ietf-mpls-psc-updates-04' is mentioned on line > 412, but not defined > > > This is a self-reference which needs to be updated with the RFC number > for this draft. > > > > I expect this to be good to go, but given the amount of reshuffling > and new text I'd like to give folks one more shot at tweaking the > language. > > The meat of the work is in section 2.2. Adrian, Elwyn - this contains > the majority of the changes based on gen-art feedback and other > discussions on the list. Please give this the once-over at your > convenience. > > > > > eric > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
