Hi Elwyn- Inline.
On Tue, Apr 22, 2014 at 11:39 AM, Elwyn Davies <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi, Eric. > > I checked over the new version and it addresses my previous comments > just fine. Thanks. > Cool! > One trivial nit: > s2.3.2: s/processesed/processed/ > OK. > I noted Adrian's point about draft-ietf-mpls-tp-psc-itu in the tracker > and I guess the suggested change is reasonable. > I agree. > If you are updating the text you could also fix: > - The style is supposed to be 'RFC 6378' rather than RFC6378 outside of > reference anchors. OK > - Sort out the punctuations of 'i.e.,' : Currently there is one with no > comma (5, para 1), two with one comma and one with two commas (s6, para > 10 - the quote from RFC 6378 where it has one comma); and of 'e.g.,' : > Currently one with no comma (s4.3, para 2). Sorry, I thought I caught all of those. > > I'll send an official telechat review when the review is scheduled. > OK. thanks! eric > Cheers, > Elwyn > > > > On Mon, 2014-04-21 at 16:20 -0400, Eric Osborne wrote: >> Folks- >> >> I have posted draft-ietf-mpls-psc-updates-04. It addresses the >> gen-art comments as well as other feeback received on this list from >> the v-03 last call. I also shuffled things around so that the section >> order made more sense. >> >> This draft elicited a comment and a warning from idnits. I believe >> they are both OK to disregard: >> >> 1) >> >> -- The draft header indicates that this document updates RFC6378, but the >> abstract doesn't seem to directly say this. It does mention RFC6378 >> though, so this could be OK. >> >> >> It's pretty clear that the document updates rfc6378. >> >> >> 2) >> >> == Missing Reference: 'RFC-ietf-mpls-psc-updates-04' is mentioned on line >> 412, but not defined >> >> >> This is a self-reference which needs to be updated with the RFC number >> for this draft. >> >> >> >> I expect this to be good to go, but given the amount of reshuffling >> and new text I'd like to give folks one more shot at tweaking the >> language. >> >> The meat of the work is in section 2.2. Adrian, Elwyn - this contains >> the majority of the changes based on gen-art feedback and other >> discussions on the list. Please give this the once-over at your >> convenience. >> >> >> >> >> eric >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Gen-art mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
