Hi, Thank you. Best, Meral
From: Kostas Pentikousis [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: Wednesday, February 11, 2015 8:56 AM To: Meral Shirazipour; [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: AW: Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08 Dear Meral, Many thanks for the review comments. We have now updated the document accordingly. Best regards, Kostas Von: Meral Shirazipour [mailto:[email protected]]<mailto:[mailto:[email protected]]> Gesendet: Samstag, 7. Februar 2015 21:18 An: [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>; [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]> Betreff: Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2015-02-07 IETF LC End Date: 2015-02-09 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as a Standards Track RFC, but I have some small comments. Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 4], Section 1, last two paragraphs: Although the draft always refers to O/TWAMP, this sections says : "This document specifies a method for enabling network measurements between a TWAMP client and a TWAMP server " The reason the O/ was omitted is explained in Section 3. A sentence should be added in section 1 at least mentioning that as described in Section 3 this document is valid mostly for TWAMP. -[general]: Suggestion to spell out all acronyms at first use, even in abstract. e.g.: O/TWAMP, IKE, SA, SeGW, eNB( By SeGW do we mean serving gateway? or security GW?), AH, ESP, IV etc... Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com<http://www.ericsson.com>
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