Cut-and-paste error in second paragraph following Table 11:
The IANA Registry "TIMESTAMP Address TLV Type Extensions" is renamed
as "ICV Address Block TLV Type Extensions" but is otherwise
^^^
unchanged.
ICV should be TIMESTAMP.
I still don't see any text relating to:
SMF_TYPE Message TLV Type Extensions
SMF_NBR_TYPE Address Block TLV Type Extensions
Tom
On 13/05/2015 6:15 PM, Jari Arkko wrote:
Thanks for your review, Tom. New version looks ok to me, do you agree Tom? And
thank you Christopher for the changes!
Jari
On 13 May 2015, at 17:51, Dearlove, Christopher (UK)
<[email protected]> wrote:
Tom
Thanks for those detailed and useful comments. The soon to be submitted next
draft will address all of them.
Christopher
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Document: draft-ietf-manet-tlv-naming-02
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
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IESG Telechat date: 14 May 2015
Summary: This document has minor issues that need to be resolved, along with a
few nits.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
1. If the requested TLV Type does not immediately define all the corresponding
type extensions for versions of that type, the Expert Reviewer or IANA will be
faced with the task of choosing an appropriate Type value within which to place
the extension. No guidance has been provided for this purpose. What is the
intention?
2. No IANA Considerations have been provided for the following registries:
TC Message-Type-specific Message TLV Types
TC Message-Type-specific Address Block TLV Types
HELLO Message-Type-specific Message TLV Types
HELLO Message-Type-specific Address Block TLV Types
SMF_TYPE Message TLV Type Extensions
SMF_NBR_TYPE Address Block TLV Type Extensions
Nits/editorial comments:
Sec. 1, third from last paragraph: s/consisteng/consistent/
Sec. 3.1, s/reguested/requested/ (both outer bullets, first line of each)
IANA Considerations, following Table 11: the current registry name is "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address
TLV Type Extensions" (missing the word "Block").
This is inconsistent with the other address block TLV types. I suggest, in
place of the current text for these two extension registries, text to resolve
the inconsistency, as follows:
OLD
The IANA Registry "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address Block TLV Type Extensions"
is unchanged.
NEW
The IANA Registry "ICV[TIMESTAMP] Address TLV Type Extensions" is
unchanged except to add the word "Block" after "Address" in the
registry name.
IANA Considerations, Table 13 and preceding text: the current registry name is "NBR_ADDR_TYPE
....". This document refers to it as "NBR_ADDR_TYPES ...." (i.e., plural). The
inconsistency needs to be resolved.
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