Elwyn: Many thanks for your detailed review. And thanks all for the changes for the previous version of the review.
Jari On 07 Jul 2015, at 11:22, Elwyn Davies <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-6lo-btle-14.txt > Reviewer: Elwyn Davies > Review Date: 2015/07/07 > IETF LC End Date: 2015/06/09 > IESG Telechat date: 2015/07/09 > > Summary: > Ready for proposed standard. Thanks for sorting out the points raised in my > last call review. The section on subnet usage is very helpful. There are a > few very minor nits that I spotted on reading the new version that can be > passed to the RFC Editor if no other changes are needed. > > Major issues: > None. > > Minor issues: > None. > > Nits/editorial comments: > s3, para 2: s/inter- peripheral/inter-peripheral/ [Remove one space] > s3.2.2, last para: "(see Section 3.2.2)" is self-referential! I think you > mean 3.2.3. > s3.2.4.2, last para (Item 3): s/if most recently/if the most recently/ > s3.2.4, para 5: To avoid the slight confusion which I had in the previous > version, I suggest a modification to this para to make it clear that the link > local address can only occur on comms to the 6LBR and not through it, thus: > OLD: > When a 6LN is sending a packet to or through a 6LBR, it MUST fully > elide the source address if it is a link-local address. A non-link- > local source address 6LN has registered with ARO to the 6LBR for the > indicated prefix MUST be fully elided if the source address is the > latest address 6LN has registered for the indicated prefix. > NEW: > When a 6LN is sending a packet to a 6LBR, it MUST fully > elide the source address if it is a link-local address. For other packets > to or > through a 6LBR with a non-link-local source address that the 6LN has > registered > with ARO to the 6LBR for the indicated prefix, the source address MUST be > fully > elided if it is the latest address that the 6LN has registered for the > indicated prefix. > END > s5: Need to expand UART acronym in new Direct Test Mode text (USB is on the > well-known list, assuming it is the Universal Serial Bus meaning). > s5, last para: s/service attacks/service attack/ > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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