Hi Elwyn,
Thank you for your review.
>s3, para 2: s/inter- peripheral/inter-peripheral/ [Remove one space]
I didn't see space in XML version or latest output from xml2rfc, so don't know
why it has been there..
>s3.2.2, last para: "(see Section 3.2.2)" is self-referential! I think you
>mean 3.2.3.
Probably so, I didn't find right away discussion that warranted it's addition
to -14 version. Changed.
s3.2.4.2, last para (Item 3): s/if most recently/if the most recently/
Changed.
>s3.2.4, para 5: To avoid the slight confusion which I had in the previous
>version, I suggest a modification to this para to make it clear that the link
>local address can only occur on comms to the 6LBR and not through it, thus:
OLD:
When a 6LN is sending a packet to or through a 6LBR, it MUST fully
elide the source address if it is a link-local address. A non-link-
local source address 6LN has registered with ARO to the 6LBR for the
indicated prefix MUST be fully elided if the source address is the
latest address 6LN has registered for the indicated prefix.
NEW:
When a 6LN is sending a packet to a 6LBR, it MUST fully
elide the source address if it is a link-local address. For other packets
to or
through a 6LBR with a non-link-local source address that the 6LN has
registered
with ARO to the 6LBR for the indicated prefix, the source address MUST be
fully
elided if it is the latest address that the 6LN has registered for the
indicated prefix.
END
That is a good clarification. Added as proposed.
>s5: Need to expand UART acronym in new Direct Test Mode text (USB is on the
>well-known list, assuming it is the Universal Serial Bus meaning).
I expanded UART and USB at the same time, because it looked nicer to have both
there in expanded form..
>s5, last para: s/service attacks/service attack/
Changed.
Best regards,
Teemu
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