Hi, Francis,

Thanks so much for your review! Please find my comments in-line....


On 07/17/2015 08:38 PM, Francis Dupont wrote:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - Abstract page 1: usually there is no very explicit reference to the
>   RFC the document obsoletes. IMHO this case could be a reasonable
>   exception.

FWIW, in the past, I was asked to explicitly note in the abstract what
RFC this document was obsoleting/updating.



>  - ToC page 3 and 18 page 25: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>   (I use a US English spell checker, I am trying to switch to
>    a UK one but both raise errors for the other alternative...
>    I suggest to ask the RFC Editor to uniformize/uniformise the
>    English variant...)

Yes... I think they do this by default.


> 
>  - 1 page 3 and many other places: e.g. -> e.g.,
> 
>  - A.1 page 29 (and other places): I have a concern about OS names,
>   for instance I prefer Microsoft Windows to simply Windows.
>   BTW the current offical name of Mac OS (MacOS) X is (Apple) OS X.

We'll double-check and update as needed.

Thanks!

Best regards,
-- 
Fernando Gont
SI6 Networks
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