Re: [Gen-art] Resolution on comments of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10

Mon, 14 Dec 2015 14:49:11 -0800 

Hi,
This (I assume still unsubmitted) version addresses my IESG ballot comments. 

Thanks!

Ben.

On 11 Dec 2015, at 5:16, Jiangyuanlong wrote:


Hi all,

Thanks a lot for your reviews.

Based on all the comments received during the IESG evaluation, we have 
prepared a tentative version 11 for this draft.
We believe all the comments are resolved, but please check whether you 
have any concerns with the texts in this version.



If there are no further comments, we will upload it as the formal 
revision 11 version.


Best regards,
Yuanlong


-----Original Message-----
From: BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A [mailto:[email protected]]
Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 11:03 PM
To: Jari Arkko

Cc: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley; 
[email protected]; IETF

Gen-ART; IETF

Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of 
draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10


Hi Jari,

Yes, we'll be doing a new revision for addressing other comments.


I've asked for today's telechat if no discusses to mark it as 
approved, revised

draft needed.

Much thanks Russ for your review!

Deborah


Sent from my iPhone


On Dec 3, 2015, at 1:08 PM, Jari Arkko <[email protected]> wrote:

Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ!


Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before 
the draft

is approved?

Jari


On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <[email protected]>

wrote:


Russ,

Thanks a lot for your review and good observations.
Please see my comments in line.

Best regards,
Yuanlong


-----Original Message-----
From: Russ Housley [mailto:[email protected]]
Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM
To: [email protected]
Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF
Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10


I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General 
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Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2015-11-13
IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary:  Almost Ready


Major Concerns: None


Minor Concerns:


Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011].  
Should this be
the 2014 version of the document?  If not, please add the 
informative

reference for [802.1Q-2011].

[YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014].



Other Editorial Comments:

The Abstract should appear on the title page.

[YJ] OK.


Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:

s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, 
[MEF6.1]

needs to be added as a normative reference.

[YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2.


Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:

s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 
[802.1Q-2003]/ Also,

please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].

[YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].


Third level section headings do not have space between the section 
number

and the section title.  For example:
s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/

[YJ] OK.


In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this 
will allow the "AC"

labels to fit better on the left:

         +----------------------------------------+
         |           VPLS-capable PE model        |
         |   +---------------+          +------+  |
         |   |               |==========|TVSI-1|------------
+---+  AC  |   |               ------------      |------------ PWs
|CE |----------|     Bridge    ------------      |------------
+---+      |   |               | Root &   +------+  |
         |   |     Module    | Leaf VLAN   o      |
         |   |               |             o      |
         |   |               |             o      |
         |   |               |             o      |
         |   |               |             o      |
+---+  AC  |   |               |   VLAN-n +------+  |
|CE |----------|               ------------VSI-n |-------------

+---+      |   |               |==========|      |------------- 
PWs

         |   |               |     ^    |      |-------------
         |   +---------------+     |    +------+  |
         |                         |              |
         +-------------------------|--------------+
                       LAN emulation Interface

     Figure 4  A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI



[YJ] OK.

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