Jari: 

Thank you for your ping.  I thought I answered this on March 6th, but alas I
did not.  I send the response today. 

Sue 

-----Original Message-----
From: Jari Arkko [mailto:[email protected]] 
Sent: Thursday, March 17, 2016 4:59 AM
To: Russ Housley
Cc: [email protected]; IETF Gen-ART
Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13

Thanks you review, Russ!

I do agree with your questions though. Authors, do you have any responses?

Jari

On 06 Mar 2016, at 23:53, Russ Housley <[email protected]> wrote:

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> Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review Date: 2016-03-06
> IETF LC End Date: 2016-03-14
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready.
> 
> Major Concerns: None
> 
> Minor Concerns:
> 
> Section 4.2 talks about authorization.  I would expect policy to 
> dictate that some writes come from a specific source, but it is 
> unclear to me whether I2RS can require that a particular write request 
> arrive on a particular channel.  Is this desirable?  If so, please 
> expand the discussion of authorization to cover this point.
> 
> 
> Nits:
> 
> Sometimes you say "i2rs architecture", but it should say "I2RS 
> architecture" to be consistent throughout the document.
> 
> Sometimes you say "I2RS Agent" and other times you say "I2RS agent".
> Please pick one and use it consistently.
> 
> Sometimes you say "I2RS Client" and other times you say "I2RS client".
> Please pick one and use it consistently.
> 
> Section 3: s/ may may vary based / may vary based /
> 
> Section 6.3: s/ the yang data model / the YANG data model /
> 
> Section 6.4.2: some bullets have periods, but others do not.
> 
> Section 7.1: s/ Yang / YANG / (more than one place)
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