Thanks you review, Russ! I do agree with your questions though. Authors, do you have any responses?
Jari On 06 Mar 2016, at 23:53, Russ Housley <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your > document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-architecture-13 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2016-03-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2016-03-14 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready. > > Major Concerns: None > > Minor Concerns: > > Section 4.2 talks about authorization. I would expect policy to > dictate that some writes come from a specific source, but it is > unclear to me whether I2RS can require that a particular write > request arrive on a particular channel. Is this desirable? If so, > please expand the discussion of authorization to cover this point. > > > Nits: > > Sometimes you say "i2rs architecture", but it should say "I2RS > architecture" to be consistent throughout the document. > > Sometimes you say "I2RS Agent" and other times you say "I2RS agent". > Please pick one and use it consistently. > > Sometimes you say "I2RS Client" and other times you say "I2RS client". > Please pick one and use it consistently. > > Section 3: s/ may may vary based / may vary based / > > Section 6.3: s/ the yang data model / the YANG data model / > > Section 6.4.2: some bullets have periods, but others do not. > > Section 7.1: s/ Yang / YANG / (more than one place) > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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