Stewart, > On Oct 24, 2017, at 11:40 AM, Stewart Bryant <[email protected]> wrote: > > Reviewer: Stewart Bryant > Review result: Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your > document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-netconf-rfc6536bis-07 > Reviewer: Stewart Bryant > Review Date: 2017-10-24 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-10-25 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-10-26 > > Summary: A well written document that is ready for publication > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > These are really minor but I notices them during the review. > > Paragraphs 1 and 2 of Section 2.2 (simplicity have a lot of overlapping > content. Perhaps they could be merged.
How about this? OLD: There is concern that a complicated ACM will not be widely deployed because it is too hard to use. It needs to be easy to do simple things and possible to do complex things, instead of hard to do everything. Configuration of the access control system needs to be as simple as possible. Simple and common tasks need to be easy to configure and require little expertise or domain-specific knowledge. Complex tasks are possible using additional mechanisms, which may require additional expertise. NEW: There is concern that a complicated ACM will not be widely deployed because it is too hard to use. Configuration of the access control system needs to be as simple as possible. Simple and common tasks need to be easy to configure and require little expertise or domain-specific knowledge. Complex tasks are possible using additional mechanisms, which may require additional expertise. > > "This choice matches if all leafs present in the rule match the request." > Maybe > it is different in C/S but the plural of leaf is usually leaves. I see two references to leafs in the model. Maybe we could change them as follows: OLD: "This choice matches if all leafs present in the rule match the request. If no leafs are present, the choice matches all requests."; NEW: "This choice matches if all leaves present in the rule match the request. If no leaves are present, the choice matches all requests."; Mahesh Jethanandani [email protected]
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