Meral - Thanx for the review. Some of your comments have already been addressed in the latest version (07) published a few days ago.
Responses inline. From: Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com] Sent: Monday, February 12, 2018 8:02 PM To: draft-ietf-bier-isis-extensions....@ietf.org; firstname.lastname@example.org Subject: Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-bier-isis-extensions-06 I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bier-isis-extensions-06 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2018-02-12 IETF LC End Date: 2018-02-22 ? IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-22 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -please updated references to latest draft version/RFC number [Les:] Done in V 07 -Section 2 would be clearer is the definitions introduced only in this document are identified as such [Les:] I don't think there are any introduced by this document. All of the definitions mentioned in Section 2 come from RFC 8279. -Please spell out multi topology, sub-domain at first use for MT SD [Les:] In Section 4.1 where we introduce the use of <MT,SD> here is what the text says (emphasis added): "Within such a domain, the extensions defined in this document advertise BIER information for one or more BIER sub-domains. Each sub-domain is uniquely identified by a subdomain-id. Each subdomain is associated with a single ISIS topology [RFC5120], which may be any of the topologies supported by ISIS. Local configuration controls which <MT,SD> pairs are supported by a router." Do you think further clarification as to the meaning of <MT,SD> is still needed?? -[Page 6], "advertisments."--->"advertisements" [Les:] Corrected in V 07. -[Page 8], "occurences"--->"occurrences" [Les:] The section which contains this misspelling was removed in V 07. Les Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com<http://www.ericsson.com>
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