Francis, thanks for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot. Alissa
> On Mar 5, 2018, at 5:27 PM, Francis Dupont <[email protected]> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20180225 > IETF LC End Date: 20180228 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > (I took my notes on version 21 but I have version 23 in front of me) > > - ToC page 2 and 6 page 27 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - 1 page 3: acknowledgement -> acknowledgement > > - 4.1 page 10: do the same than 1.1 page 3: refer to RFC8174 too > for keywords. > > - 4.1 page 18 (advanced-compare): spectify -> specify > > - 4.1 page 23 (remote transport and tls) (twice): > specified: an ipv4 address, an ipv6 address, ipv4->IPv4 and ipv6->IPv6 > > - 6 page 27: there is no "and" between the two last names and no > final dot so I am afraid the list was truncated (BTW obviously iy is > not the case but please add a final dot, i.e.: > Aleksandr Zhdankin -> Aleksandr Zhdankin. > > Note I trust the Yang tools to have checked the syntax. > > Regards > > [email protected] > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
