Francis, Thanks for your review. My comments below…
On 3/5/18, 2:53 PM, "Francis Dupont" <[email protected]> wrote: I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20180225 IETF LC End Date: 20180228 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: (I took my notes on version 21 but I have version 23 in front of me) - ToC page 2 and 6 page 27 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments [clw] Accepted - 1 page 3: acknowledgement -> acknowledgement [clw] Accepted - 4.1 page 10: do the same than 1.1 page 3: refer to RFC8174 too for keywords. [clw] Accepted - 4.1 page 18 (advanced-compare): spectify -> specify [clw] Accepted - 4.1 page 23 (remote transport and tls) (twice): specified: an ipv4 address, an ipv6 address, ipv4->IPv4 and ipv6->IPv6 [clw] one address is for the UDP case and the other is for the TLS case. I think this this is ok. - 6 page 27: there is no "and" between the two last names and no final dot so I am afraid the list was truncated (BTW obviously iy is not the case but please add a final dot, i.e.: Aleksandr Zhdankin -> Aleksandr Zhdankin. [clw] Accepted. Thanks, Clyde Note I trust the Yang tools to have checked the syntax. Regards [email protected] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
