Theresa, thanks for your review. I entered a No Objection ballot and requested a response to your review.
Alissa > On Oct 30, 2019, at 5:42 AM, Theresa Enghardt via Datatracker > <[email protected]> wrote: > > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07 > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt > Review Date: 2019-10-30 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-05 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be fixed before publication. > > Major issues: None. > > Minor issues: None. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > The abstract is hard to parse and could be improved by fixing the following > nits. > > OLD: "Facility backup method allows" > NEW: "The facility backup method allows" > > OLD: "The many-to-one nature of local repair technique" > NEW: "The many-to-one nature of this local repair technique" > > OLD: "This document enumerates facility backup procedures in RFC 4090" > NEW: "This document enumerates the facility backup procedures in RFC 4090" [or > "several facility backup procedures", if not all procedures are enumerated > here] > > OLD: "and hence make facility backup method refresh-interval dependent." > NEW: "and hence make the facility backup method refresh-interval dependent." > > OLD: "The RSVP-TE extensions defined in this document will enhance" > NEW: "This document defines RSVP-TE extensions to enhance" > > Are "facility backup method", "facility backup procedure" and "facility backup > protection mechanism" all the same thing? Please consider using only a single > term to avoid confusion. > > Please double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles in the rest of > the document as well. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
