Hi Theresa, I will address all your comments in the next revision of the draft. Please see inline for more responses.
Thanks, Chandra. Juniper Business Use Only > -----Original Message----- > From: Theresa Enghardt via Datatracker <[email protected]> > Sent: Wednesday, October 30, 2019 3:12 PM > To: [email protected] > Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; > [email protected] > Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07 > > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for > the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call > comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq > __;!8WoA6RjC81c!VJusypwlMIp99fxAZbbzjHusxRuJ- > XUr1j1Q2NN0fshIQNLXXBywtr1VKj3SmiM$ >. > > Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07 > Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt > Review Date: 2019-10-30 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-05 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be fixed before publication. > > Major issues: None. > > Minor issues: None. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > The abstract is hard to parse and could be improved by fixing the following > nits. > > OLD: "Facility backup method allows" > NEW: "The facility backup method allows" > > OLD: "The many-to-one nature of local repair technique" > NEW: "The many-to-one nature of this local repair technique" > > OLD: "This document enumerates facility backup procedures in RFC 4090" > NEW: "This document enumerates the facility backup procedures in RFC > 4090" [or "several facility backup procedures", if not all procedures are > enumerated here] > > OLD: "and hence make facility backup method refresh-interval dependent." > NEW: "and hence make the facility backup method refresh-interval > dependent." > > OLD: "The RSVP-TE extensions defined in this document will enhance" > NEW: "This document defines RSVP-TE extensions to enhance" > [Chandra] Will update all the above in the next version of the draft. > Are "facility backup method", "facility backup procedure" and "facility > backup protection mechanism" all the same thing? Please consider using > only a single term to avoid confusion. > [Chandra] Yes, they refer to the same and will use "facility backup protection mechanism" in all places. > Please double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles in the rest of > the document as well. [Chandra] Yes, I will go parse the document fully and address this comment. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
